Wednesday, April 29, 2009

Love you Sweetheart

This weeks 3ww being

Opportunity
Quarrel
Service

Darling,
Although our service is at the same place,but I know that transfer of anyone of us is imminent.
I know we love each other but our quarrels are eating a substantial part of our loving.
Today I just missed the opportunity of sitting in the same bus as yours coz I was late...
And while sitting alone two drops of tears have rolled by,and I have known darling that what you are to me.What would happen,one day,if you really have to live in a different city...

Love you Sweetheart
Yours
Harsha


Opportunity -my last
Love - the only service
Quarrel - love 's realization

18 comments:

  1. The last line does not quite read well.

    I do like the letter writing.

    raise the bar

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  2. Agree to gautami :)

    The last line needs to be worked on. And I love the concept of writing letters :)

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  3. The letter concept is very good. And yes, a good explanation of how quarrels should be seen.

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  4. Yup Dude dis one's ooosome... dis kinda stuff oolways expected 4m ya... keep up d gud work...

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  5. The writing of letters is a lost art, but done well are just as powerful as poetry. I would agree with the rest, the last line needs some work, but just a small fix.

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  6. Ah, love and quarrels. Nice use of letter writing...

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  7. Phew, any excuse to say I Love You, love letters are cool!

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  8. God have Given You Opportunity to be Loved by others and to Love other.But Quarrel comes with the Package of Love so now its your service to maintain a balance between them...and don't get tensed by it.
    :)

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  9. Have to agree with what others have said about the last line. It just doesn't work but letters are close to my heart and I love that idea so please keep at it.

    I write lots of letters and I wish more people did as it is a wonderful thing to give and to receive.

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  10. I miss love letters. Enjoyed this. Thanks.

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  11. Great idea. It makes me think of the play where two characters just read letters to one another. Wish I remembered the name :)

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  12. @Gautami
    Thanx dear.
    Well,I even dint know wyl writin dat dis wud lead to letter writing.I have tried after your advice.Now it stands as a solitairy letter and d 2nd 1 as an independent part.

    @Winnie the pooh
    Yup,dear.thanks.I tried again.Letter writing.Me 2 tried for the 1st tym.A novel cncpt,I mst say.

    @anthonynorth
    Thanx anthony that you liked it.
    Well,there was nuthn dat was actually coming to my mind.But after wednesday evenings incidents the value of love and quarrels flowed seamlessly;)

    @Shadow of darkness
    Samir,I know I owe u a lot of apologies:(
    Thanx 4 saying so mch buddy.

    @ThomG
    a small fix:)
    Well dats wat I have tried

    @Life without Clots
    Thanx dear for liking my letters:)

    @TumbleWords
    Thanx buddy.Love and quarrels,2 sides of d same coin.
    More d love more d quarrels.

    @Sweet Talkin guy
    I agree dear.Any excuse to say so makes life wonderful:)

    @Gotybaaz
    Wonderful use of words brother.
    Why dont you join the fun...

    @Jeeves
    Thanx Jeeves.

    @WitchMojo
    Thanx Witchmojo for the earnest advice.
    I wud surely keep at it.
    Have tried to improve it.

    @Angel
    Dear Angel,Actually service just stopped me from doing anything else.
    I just dint want to do a poem as it was what I did last tym.
    Thanx you liked it:)

    @Susan
    Thanx Susan for finding my letter worthy enuf to bring you a remembrance of your love letters:)

    @Lisa Drafall
    There z one famous hindi play of seasoned actors-Shabana Azmi and Farooque Sheikh where they read 20 year old love letters to each oder.
    Thanx 4 droppin by

    ~Harsha

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  13. I like the way this has been transformed.

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  14. Although this version reads easier, it was only the final line that spoiled the original. Now, it is still a beautiful sentiment but is missing some of the passionate heart of the original. Perhaps we were wrong to tell you to change it...

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  15. That play is "tumhari amrita" in hindi...inspired by english classic play "Love letters", I saw it once with rajat kapoor performing...It was beautiful!!

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